I really enjoyed your poem. It made me think of the times I spent in Disneyland and Disney World!! I did notice though that the last line is suppose to be a metaphor and you used a simile. I still love you and your poem!!! I also really like your title!!!!
I'd almost argue that you should swap order of the lines. BTW, you aren't making use of metaphor as much as you are making use of a term called synedochy. Check your book's glossary for details.
Smiles from mouse ear to mouse ear;
I really enjoyed your poem. It made me think of the times I spent in Disneyland and Disney World!! I did notice though that the last line is suppose to be a metaphor and you used a simile. I still love you and your poem!!! I also really like your title!!!!
ReplyDeleteI love that you used "mouse ear to mouse ear." It made me smile and think of Mickey =) Good job!
ReplyDeleteI'd almost argue that you should swap order of the lines. BTW, you aren't making use of metaphor as much as you are making use of a term called synedochy. Check your book's glossary for details.
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